He steps over to the sofa, picks it up, buries his face in the wool. He wrinkles his nose in anticipation of her smell, imagining lily-of-the-valley, soft, subtle - his mother's favourite perfume. But the aroma exuding from the left-behind garment is less fragrant. Cigarette smoke and sweat. She hasn't washed it in weeks. Now he looks close up he can see red soup stains by the V-shaped neck, sugar crystals stuck to the mid-riff, and what appears to be chocolate on the hem. He hasn't expected this. For a moment he hesitates.
Then he remembers her smile as she left. He picks up his mobile and texts: You left your jumper behind. Shall I bring it to you? He sits back on the futon, hugging the jumper close to him. It is a little piece of her. Soon, he will have the rest.
***
She arrives at the bar and orders pernod and blackcurrant. Tiny Tempeh is blaring out from the music system. It is early still. Soon this place will be full of Friday night screeching, but right now she has time to nip out the back for a quick fag. She has her pick of tables, so she chooses one furthest from the door. She takes the cigarette packet from her back pocket, pulls out a slender cigarette, caresses it in her fingers. The lighter flares orange as she places the cigarette in her lips, lighting the tip. She drags in the sweet smell and breathes out a long sigh. The first fag of the evening is always the best - full of hope and desire, before a night's smoking causes her throat to rasp.
Though there are heaters in the courtyard, she has placed herself too far from them. That was stupid, it is November after all. She shivers, reaching in her bag for her jumper. It is not there. Where can she have left it? She retraces her steps in her mind. The post office? No, she wasn't wearing it then. The tube. She definitely didn't have it then. She knew she was wearing it at lunchtime because it was cold when she nipped out for a sandwich. She is still trying to work it out when a message blinks on her phone. You left your jumper behind. Shall I bring it to you? For a moment, she struggles to remember the number and then it comes to her. Jan's friend. The one who's DVDs she'd borrowed. She'd dropped them off earlier. She'd forgotten all about that.
She is about to text back, but the door into the patio opens. Her date for the evening. "I thought I'd find you out here." He smiles. She smiles back, shoving her phone in her bag. She'll phone wotsisname tomorrow. There's no rush.
***
It will take him three weeks of persistent texting to arrange a meeting which will last five minutes. His love will last for a few seconds more.
7 comments:
Brilliant, I love the way you twisted this old motif and made it humourous. Have a big smile on my face now.
It's so easy to over-analyse things to do with dating. You leave something behind because you're forgetful, and someone else interprets it as a sign it was never intended to be.
love the way the uninahbited jumper comes to represent the lingering image of the loved one, but like the jumper, the love is ultimately misplaced & uninhabited. Reminded me of the Calvino story about the empty suit of armour carrying on the life of its owner, unable to recognise that feudalism has become extinct and it no longer has a place in society
marc nash
I feel bad for this unnamed fellow. He'll be crushed to find that that dream image he has in his head doesn't live up to the expectations.
I loved how you transformed something as ordinary as a jumper into an object of desire and memory.
Very neat story!
Thanks everyone, sometimes the simplest ideas work the best...
Perhaps he's better off without her: she clearly has terrible table manners. If only he could know what he's missing! Great idea for a flash.
Brilliant stroke of describing our protagonist as "the jumper" - dooming the plot without even having to say what will happen for so long.
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